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« on: April 04, 2004, 09:04:34 PM »
what do you think of my awful poem?



"If You Knew" - By David Angel

If you knew the story ended sad
would you still keep reading on?

If you knew I had to leave you,
how far would you want to go?

Before the time came...

If in your nightmare you were falling
would you want to hit the ground?

If I asked you one last time
would you want to go?

Then when we parted, after getting things started
I think that would blow.
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« Reply #1 on: April 04, 2004, 09:20:17 PM »
I think I like it. Good work! What inspired this peice?
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\"God whispers to us in our pleasures, speaks in our conscience, but shouts in our pains: it is His megaphone to rouse a deaf world.\"  -- C.S. Lewis (The Problem of Pain)
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« Reply #2 on: April 04, 2004, 09:22:13 PM »
oh just ill communication in a relationship on my part

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