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« on: July 02, 2003, 10:06:12 PM »
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--Kirk, from Gilmore Girls when Lorelai asked why he was in a hot dog suit
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« Reply #1 on: July 02, 2003, 10:29:00 PM »
Great stuff. It's interesting to see how these songs go along with the stuff you talk about in your blog.
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« Reply #2 on: July 03, 2003, 01:46:03 AM »
your poetry is..... awesome.  not only is it well-written but it's honest.. thanks for posting it!  

i love how writing is freeing, too....  but i bet you know that.   Smiley  
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« Reply #3 on: July 03, 2003, 11:25:13 AM »
An excellent inaugural song for the new phorum...and an excellent one in general. Your rhyme scheme is excellent, but it doesn't feel like you forced the words to go with it. I think that really helps the flow.
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